Could improve a little bit
For instance at the start I can hear something grainy, maybe the bass that is being a bit louder than it should be. Also doesn't sound too much like hip hop, sounds more like house, trance type music. The piano and drums are real simple and the bass doesn't sound extraordinary either sadly.
Sounds kind of like a melodramatic piece that is pretty sad and down feeling the whole time. Kind of makes me feel as if I had lost all the friends in the world and no one even cares that I was missing either. The gun shot at the end was also kind of random to me as well.
Overall, try to remove the grainy sound, and if you really want it to get more of a hip hop feel, try adding in some scratches, deeper bass notes, faster drums, and some other hip hop sounds as well.
Good luck on future pieces.
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